爱华网就“私家车迅速发展的利与弊”进行了热烈的讨论，请根据下表提供的内容，客观介绍讨论的情况，并谈谈你自己的看法。
注意：1. 对所给要点，不要简单翻译，要有适当发挥。
2. 词数：150 左右。
3. 参考词汇：消耗consume (vt.)
尾气the waste gas
高峰时 in the rush hours
解题指导
1. 谋篇布局，拟定框架。
本文可分四段写：
第一段：导入话题。
第二段：私家车迅速发展的好处。
第三段：私家车迅速发展的弊端。
第四段：建议。
2. 统筹时态。
(1) 第一段导入介绍上个月你们班就“私家车迅速发展的利与弊”进行了热烈的讨论，应用一般过去时。
(2) 第二、三段陈述私家车迅速发展的利与弊，是客观事实，应用一般现在时。
(3) 第四段提出自己的建议，描述的是将来，用一般将来时。
3. 推敲要点表达方法。
(1) 价位合理: prices are reasonable
(2) 给人们的生活带来便利，提高了生活质量： people enjoy its convenience and better life quality as well
(3) 带动相关行业的发展，解决许多人的就业问题:some related industries have also been brought about, which contributes to more employment
(4) 消耗太多能源:consume too much energy
(5) 高峰时交通拥堵: traffic jams occur in the rush hours
(6) 停车困难: it is difficult for people to park their cars4. 分析私家车迅速发展的利与弊，提出有建设性和可行性的建议，不可平庸。
5. 整合文章的整体效果，尽可能使用一些高级词汇和复杂句式，运用过渡性词汇，力求衔接紧密流畅，提升文章的表达档次。
学生习作选登
Last month, we had a discussion about the good and wrong of the rapid development of personal cars in our city. People's opinions are quite different.
Firstly, car prices are reasonable, it is not a dream for ordinary families to buy a car. Secondly,people live conveniently and life quality is raised too. It helps develop related industries. More people will have jobs.
Cars use too much power, and the waste gas pollutes the environment. The roads are not enough and traffic jams occur in the rush hours. People park their cars not so easily.
I suggest that people don't buy cars unleit is necessary. It wastes a lot of money. If there are not so many cars on the roads, the traffic will not be heavy. It is our duty to protect the environment against pollution.
点评与修改建议
本文虽然条理清楚，层次清晰，行文连贯，语言也有一定的亮点，并使用了一些高级词汇和复杂句式(见黑体部分)，但至多只能属于中等表达档次的文章。主要问题如下：
1. 文章的语言不够地道、得体，尤其是划线部分。
2. 简单句使用过多，应增加一些高级词汇和复杂句式，以提高文章的表达档次。3. 行文中还应增加一些连接词，以增强表达效果。
4. 最后自己的建议只是停留在面上，没有深度，没有建设性，不能从根本上解决问题。这一点，是影响文章表达档次从而获取高分的关键所在。
5. 文中有多处语言表达错误。例如：第一段第一行的 “the good and wrong”, 用词不当，应改为the advantages and disadvantages; “personal”应改为private。第二段第一句是典型的病句，在 “it is not a dream ...” 之前应添加so或and;第三段第一行的 “power” 应改为energy; 第四段第一句的 “don't” 应改为 “(should) not”，因为suggest表示“建议”时，所引导的从句要用虚拟语气。
习作修改与欣赏
Last month we had a heated discussion about the advantages and disadvantages of the rapid development of private cars in our city. People's opinions are quite different.Firstly, car prices are reasonable, so owning a private car is no longer a dream for ordinary families. Secondly, people are enjoying its convenience and better life quality as well. What's more, some related industries have also been brought about, which contributes to more employment.
However, besides the advantages mentioned above, there also exist some disadvantages. Cars consume too much energy, and the waste gas from cars pollutes the environment. What's worse, there are not enough roads and traffic jams occur in the rush hours. Apart from that, people find it hard to park their cars due to the lack of parking lots.
I strongly recommend the number of private cars be limited and public bus service be improved. The government should also take measures to reduce pollution.
